this has to be said
I see the sun begin to rise.....I mean... sorry but this didn't really do much for me as you didn't seem to have done much with the song..I will give you points for turning a emotional song into a calm relaxing song and because MACHINE FUCKING HEAD!!!
But other then that i can't really say much , it's looped. Maybe merging other soft songs like deafening silence or blank generation may help, i don't know. But at the end of the day its machine head..keep on rockin and get the blackening!!!